Monday, February 12, 2007
My Rage-Cause
There has been many times where I have been mad. One of the times I will never forget was when I was at a soccer game and I was playing playing defense. This player was coming at m and I got the ball from him. I was just to simply get the ball and kick it out of our side. But instead I decided to try to take it all the way to the other goal keeper and score. But they ended up taking the ball away from me and they scored on our goaly. I was very pissed at myself for ever doing that.
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I liked this paragraph because you talk about soccer, which I could relate to.That kind of thing hasn't happened to me because I always passed the ball to my teamates.Not like you that hogs the ball and wants to be the star of the game.Some suggestioons that I would make would be to make the paragraph a lottle bit more longer and use stronger adjectives and be more datailed.
Antonio, I liked this pargraph because it's something we can all relate to,to have something taken away from us, whether it's a soccer ball or a loved one. You feel mad at yourself even though it's not really your fault. I liked how in the beginning you said 'there have been many times where I have been mad...' that makes this paragraph even more relateable, because we've all been mad before but there some moments you just remember.
(Laura)
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